My Freedom

Poetry Type: *Ghazal

 

I always  wanted to  fly high  with  my  fearless freedom,

Achieve the impossible and justifying the desirous freedom.

 

But, I have been caged by  several bars  of  constraints

Which is holding and obliterating my helpless freedom.

 

I want to be unique; Different;Stand out from the crowd

Which can be feasible, Only by my ambitious freedom.

 

Financial pressure, One of the bars of the cage, Diverts me

To an ordinary path and closes my path of  congruous freedom.

 

I can physically roam and wander in this wide world,

But, Only by deserting my choice of hapless freedom.

 

-Sudharsan Srinivasan

 

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*A Ghazal is a poem that is made up like an odd numbered chain of couplets, where each couplet is an independent poem. It should be natural to put a comma at the end of the first line. The Ghazal has a refrain of one to three words that repeat, and an inline rhyme that preceedes the refrain. Lines 1 and 2, then every second line, has this refrain and inline rhyme, and the last couplet should refer to the authors pen-name… The rhyming scheme is AA bA cA dA eA etc.

7 responses »

  1. Great job this was my first time using the form as well for Cubby’s challenge.

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  3. Cubby says:

    This is a wonderful ghazal! I had to look more closely at my own ghazals and modified them based on that last little bit of information you provided here about the rhyming scheme. I tend to add extra rhymes at the end of lines without even realizing. Mind if I link or re-post (with link) your poem on my blog?

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    • sudharsan says:

      Thanks for your thoughts cubby 🙂 Oh,I too didn’t realize the extra rhyme(as you said) when I read…Sorry for that…And glad you modified it….But, I loved ‘Hand in Hand’ poem. I don’t mind re-posting….It will be my honor 🙂 When I took up this Ghazal challenge I thought it would be easy but it was little bit tough(but that’s what the fun part is)…

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      • Cubby says:

        No need to be sorry for helping me clarify the structure of the ghazal! Many thanks instead! I just added your ghazal to the challenge post. It really is terrific. So nice to see so many great ghazals going up! Thanks for allowing the re-post! 🙂

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    • sudharsan says:

      That’s great !! Looking forward to read more ghazals 🙂

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